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Question: Your thoughts on this little poem of mine!?
"Oh, to be young again!."
So sigh the ancient ones, with hearts heavy with the weight of their distant years!.
An old woman sits with her ginger-root hands resting limply in her lap!. "I was beautiful once" rings again and again in her mind!. A wrinkled grandfather warms his aching feet by the crackling fire!. His eyes, which once held the same spark as the leaping flames, can see no more!. A young boy hovers at the edge of the circle, flitting to and fro with youthful energy!. A single thought brushes his consciousness!. "I hope I never end up like them!.!.!."

One night, one night, one night
Our souls were made of light
We believed with all our might
All the world was right

All loved, one love, none
Your quaint song had begun
Three days, two days, one
And now what's done is done

Tonight, tonight, tonight
I feel cruel winter's bite
Tonight, tonight, tonight
I've given up our fight
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i like the middle stanza the best!.!.!.i feel it's the least clichedWww@QuestionHome@Com

You are very talented!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com