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An abrupt moment;
A glare stole me
From my thoughts!.
His chocolate eyes
Kissed my eye lids
From where he stood
Almost fifteen metres away!.
A gold token spun
In his right eye!.
The evening sun was
Creeping into the darkness!.
The final rays of light
Licking goodbye
Along his temples and brow!.
His lips curled into
A knowing smile
And I exhaled
At the sight of him !
I couldn't let him
Figure it out!.
That this simple
Twenty-something,
Wearing a pair of jeans
Messy brunette waves
And a sleepy
docile expression
Could be capable
Of inciting unbridled
Peaks reminscent
In the multi-layered "Dali-esque" paintings!.
And yet my
Feminine self pulled away
Externally;
Casually, I stood
Until my emotions threatened
To give colour
To my cheeks!.
My desire drove me
To discard reason
Swept to disappear
Into the hustle and bustle
Of the vast city night!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
AMAZING POEM!!!! THIS IS AWESOME!!! fabulous writing, its great!. truly!. i love it!!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love it!!Www@QuestionHome@Com