I need a name for this poem...let me know how it sound.?

Question: I need a name for this poem!.!.!.let me know how it sound!.!?

I wrote about you in my journal today

Yes, I am obsessed, I am obsessed with you

You came into my life with that sexy smile
That vibrant personality
That manliness that so attracts me

You are all I’ve been waiting for
All I’ve yearned for
Yes, I’ve finally found you

But do I have anything to be thankful for
You, who do not know I exist
You, who is only into yourself
You who is driven by your friends

I guess I’ve found an empty shell
A glossy image
No depth
No heart
No feelings
So lacking in emotions and maturity
No sense of self
No direction
Nothing to offer in a relationship

I have found nothing
I will continue to look
And look
And look…!.!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

figured you outWww@QuestionHome@Com

Up to the word "But", you're so sure this is "the guy"
After "But", the tone is completely different, and he's not "the guy"

If this was a continuous speech, I would worry about you being Bipolar or something!. But it sounds like there should be a time lapse or more verses after "Yes, I've finally found you"Www@QuestionHome@Com

The Wait is Over!.
or
The Wait will never be Over
or
The Wait isn't over!.!.!.yet
or
Looking for you
and Black and Gold!.
You suck!.
Copy this persons poem then you're a loser, an absolute loser!. think of your own damn stuff!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

stalker

answer my question plz http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.

i need help!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nothing to offer !.!.!. the poem is very interestingWww@QuestionHome@Com

Reflections on Emo!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

ObsessionWww@QuestionHome@Com

Obession
or
About you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Beautiful: I like it alot!. my first thinking by reading this is : INVISIBLEWww@QuestionHome@Com

Psycho StalkerWww@QuestionHome@Com

i would title it Nothing about NothingWww@QuestionHome@Com

Reflection!.!.!.!.!.!.sounds pretty good btw :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

very profound i would say hmmm i would think the title should be !.!.!.!.Focused/Unfocused Www@QuestionHome@Com

I need a lifeWww@QuestionHome@Com

i think you should call it **** stained monkey ballsWww@QuestionHome@Com

Looking through you!.!.!.
great poem :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'm stealing your poem, thanks!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well, since you asked for my opinion I won't hold back!.

First of all, this isn't a poem!. Prose be what it is!.

So when you ask me to give you a title for your poem, I can't answer your question!. I will give you a title for your prose!.

"Every relationship that is not your true love!."

This starts out just plain creepy!. Then turns into boring descriptions of the guy you like!. You move into the incredibly cliched idea of him being all you've waited for and being elated that you've finally found him!. Then we go into the part of the prose that completely contradicts what you've just written!. We learn the guy's an asshole, that he's not what you thought he was, that you feel like ****, and that you pick yourself up and keep looking!. Whoop dee doo!.

What in there teaches me anything new about the world!. What makes me feel that you actually learned from your experience!. And most importantly, what in that long list of pointless things makes it any different from something you'd write in a paragraph except that you broke the lines up!.

This is not poetry, it's hardly prose, and I don't know what you expected to get from me, but any sort of amazement or awe I certainly do not feel!.

Here's what you need to do!. Go and read some REAL poetry, learn the rules of the art that you've butchered here, and come back when you know what metaphor and trope are!.

At the very least you didn't rhyme!. Thank you for that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

well i wouldnt call that a poem, and its not cause it doesent look like a poem!.!. cause there is no definition on how a poem should look like!.
It makes no sense the way you use your punctuation that it looks like some lines that you just seperated into more lines!.!.

And you ask us to give it a name!? Well you should know that!.

You Contradict yourself in your poem - and it would be clever if you did it with a purpose!. But i doubt it!.!.!.

Call it!.!.
>> The one poem on yahoo that is lickin my balls <<

Its easy calling your self a poet and what you write poetry (Speaking in general) - But if there is no soul, heart or mind to it - its very easy to see what a piece of crap it isWww@QuestionHome@Com