My newest poem. what do you think?

Question: My newest poem!. what do you think!?

There's a fine line,
Between Heaven and Hell!.
You can walk down the stairs,
Or jump up the well!.

They can put on a smile,
Fake a sweet kiss!.
But deep down inside,
Harbor dark bliss!.

The eyes cannot see,
What the heart hides inside!.
The soul's a closed book,
Not a box open wide!.

A tear can be a trap,
And a smile a scheme!.
It's easy to put on a mask,
Make others dream!.

Be careful what you do,
Where your feet go!.
What the world plots,
No one can know!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Whoever said to drop this is INSANE!!

I think that is a really good poem!

You are the next Shakespeare! (Sorry to whoever said Edgar Allen Poe, but I thought this would fit better =])

Keep at it, and who knows what will happen!

Good Luck and my best wishes future poet! Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nice job,but it gets a little off track with your trying to rhyme,but it gets back on track so good job!.Sounds like a teenager,learning life is not all its cracked up to be!.In other words it seems to tell of life and the pain of learning not all can be trusted-such is the way in the real world!.All in all a very good job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

from my POV it's a good one!.!.!.

the bad things is!.!. it gives me some kind of suggestive like!.!.!.
"humans cant be trusted, they're liar all of them~ don't trust any humans, you'll be sorry for that~"

even tough it mean to take care for ourselves!. :>
nice one anyway~ Www@QuestionHome@Com

I get your general idea behind the poem
although its not very memorable

think beyond rhyming every other line (like every other poem)

the thoughts are a little scattered!.!.!.I like the last 4 lines as an opener better - it sets the tone and direction betterWww@QuestionHome@Com

its really nice words!. (^_^)!

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you better copy write that b4 someone steals it, especially since you just posted it on the web!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

ugh, i said it 30 years ago as a publisher and i'll say it again!.!.!.

drop this idea and find purpose in life!.
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Your the NExt Edgar Allan PoeWww@QuestionHome@Com

That is really good ! you Should be VERY proudWww@QuestionHome@Com

I LOVE IT!!! THIS IS AMAZING!!! What were you thinking about when you wrote this poem!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

sweetWww@QuestionHome@Com

I love it!. You description is really good!. Keep up the good work!Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow you go girlWww@QuestionHome@Com

i like it :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

BRAVO u r the next greatest poet the world shall see

ROSES 4 U
Roses

Hello friends its roses again
Roses all the way
Only will roses ever stay,
Upon your coat button and as flowers
In a vase and Roses as a name for you
And then someone will say
Roses are red
Violets are blue,
Call a rose by any other name its true!.

Roses will remain the way they are,
Their smell shall travel very far,
From London to Australia
Or the bottom of the sea,
Where Jack Dawson was said to be born free!.

Had there been no Titanic there would
Have been no’ Rose’,
Nor ‘Hello Canada’, to compose,
Nor my friend would have to say
Why y do I have to wear clothes’’ today!.

Nor another of my fans ‘Hassan’ would have no romance,
Without a Rose,’ Hello Canada’, would have no stance!.
Kroshta, nor Cleopatra nor Greek woman,
Nor Solitaire would have been,
On the internet ever seen!.

For roses sure are red and violets are still blue,
My love is for Canada as much as it is for you!.
Roses will sell the way they usually do!.
Hopefully you all will display when’ Hello’ has
‘’Gone With The Wind’’,
And does you remind,
Sweet memories of roses
He does leave behind!.

Roses are red and always will be
Beautiful flowers for you and me,
Let heavens strip dead,
But roses will always be red!.
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