I held a Butterfly today
Multi-faceted eyes
Reflected the sky!.
Inscrutable, he plotted
His next transatlantic hurricane!.
Flapped his wings!.
Big dreams for a butterfly!.
I liked his style!.
Respect is earned!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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Multi-faceted eyes Reflected the sky!. Inscrutable, he plotted His next transatlantic hurricane!. Flapped his wings!. Big dreams for a butterfly!. I liked his style!. Respect is earned!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I really like this poem!. Straight and sharp!. Maybe "Respect is earned" is it's own line, maybe not!. Maybe it stays in the stanza and becomes "his earned respect"!. Maybe not!.Www@QuestionHome@Com A thousand paths, a million lives !.!.!. A thousand paths have I travelled Seeking only to search A glimpse or a glimmer of your presence!. With great devotion I have remained Your coming remains awanting I stand at the juncture and watch you pass Upon the route you have chosen Speaking not of the shackles about my feet Watching you roam with gay abandon How would perchance if it had been My heart free and your feet bound And you were to endure my toils and pain And I were to shed your tears of blood!. Entrapped within this cloak of darkness In want of a light you so brightly shine Upon others in your way abiding Were you to endure the torment I endure!. It arises this light the darkness yearns for The light itself drowning in depths The words I sought to speak silently falling Spoken, spilled forth from your angst!.!.!. A thousand paths have I journeyed To remain transfixed at a juncture in time Ages, millennia pass by as moments And an eternity retained in times without thee !.!.!. Inspired by a song !.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Could I ask for the butterflies wings to 'flutter' instead of 'flap'!.!.!.!.some-how 'flapped' made me think of a bird!? The word is too heavy for a butterfly!. Nice!.!.!.!.I love it when people get into the mind of an insect or animal and give them grandiose dreams!.!.!.and why should they not have them!? We do, and in the scheme of things we are equally insignificant!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Now that is a colourful painting!. I love lines 2 through 5 especially!. Good to know that someone else contemplates the magnitude of the minute:)Www@QuestionHome@Com You have great vision today!.!. Inscrutable!.!.!.!. indeed ! nicely done!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com what about creation!? or your sences feeling seeing hearing so nuch as to give respect!. I like it eather way!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Courageous fragile fearless butter fly!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Your poem cheers him on!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I like your style!. Well said!. Www@QuestionHome@Com You earned my respect to-day, nice poem and thought!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |