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Question: And if God is a savior then where is the shore, that washed the fear from my eyes!.!?
He carries a vagueness through all of his words
As he leads me into his field
And I look through his eyes
To the root of his lies
In this room where beauty was born
So the natives all gasped when I took one more clasp
At the thoughts that I sent to the moon
While he just laid back
On the hot burning wax
That he melted to cool my perfume
And if god is a savior then where is the shore
that washed the fear from my eyes
Now my body is numb
From his long toting gun
Poking holes through the doors in my mind
He lights up a fire where he keeps his best squire
As he makes her dance to his tune
And from under his thumb
Comes a newly born nun
That he molded from his purest days
And I run to the door that’s been battered and fraught
By the hands of a badly drawn man
I still open the lock
But know he has the key
To a mind that’s been formed in a ruin
Now I look to the man who’s so suddenly bare
Of the moral that he held too tight
And I cover my bruises
In a sheet of old movies
That my thoughts still play to the night
Opinions/ Critiques, thankyou!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Oh you are a tortured soul, aren't you and my compassion just tore from me as I read your words!.
I have felt what you are saying and yet never so profoundly described my feeling!.
You are a brilliant, talented mind but I hope the bitter visuals leave and once more you take Allah to your soul
It is not He who bombs apart this world
But mankind in a fool's greed!.
May God bless you aka AsalaamAlaikum
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If he isn't real, I asked, how would anyone know!.!.!.
but then they told me,
"That's why we die, little one, that's why we die!.!.!."Www@QuestionHome@Com
I always appreciate the feelings expressed!. Bravo!
About the rhymes - shall you still work for some of them or let them as they are!?
About God !.!.!. there is no connection between He and what WE are doing to ourselves on Earth!. Here lies our mistake!. The same the children who stumble over something and crying they blame for their parent didn't see & take their hand before the incident, the same with us, the humans are blaming our spiritual father - WHAT for!?
It is our duty "to grow up"!. Our spiritual father gave us a soul!. It's up to us, entirely, WHAT are we doing with our life, with our body, with our soul, with everything !.!.!.
We kill each other, we lie each other, we steal each other, etc!., we get high our self with drugs, with alcohol, with many other pleasures and the moment we discover the zero substance of any of them we don't even realize how much we have lost, just blame for "a God" !.!.!. for we got sick, lonely, in debts !.!.!. we end in hate !.!.!.
Are we "blind"!? Is this the way we choose !.!.!. to be refutable ill - like the gay!? It's their choice ! It's our choice, just for our SELF ! It is not GOD the One who choose for which path we shall take !.!.!.
But He is there, and cries sometimes for us, and gives us another and another and another CHANCE!.
But our life long time is SHORT!. At the gate of our life's Good Bye we shall HAVE !.!.!. our own choice - if anything good !.!.!. The scars of our own war, the war with our SELF, the peace between ourselves and all which shall be but within us!.Www@QuestionHome@Com