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Question: From poem to song!. I revised this, comments please :)!?
Started out as a poem, but thinking of turning it into a song:

All my life I've been searching,
For something that is real,
Never really knowing,
What it was I wanted!.

Living in the moment,
But always changing gears,
Decisively I was indecisive,
Holding on to anything I could!

Now I'm chasing after you,
Trying to slow things down,
I see your smile,
I know I've won this battle!.

Fast forward was my speed,
Never taking time,
To see the seasons change,
Or see the truth inside!.

You came into my life,
Caught me off my guard,
Opened up my eyes,
And walked away!.

Now I'm chasing after you,
Trying to slow things down,
I see your smile,
I know I've won this battle!.

Forgetting all I used to be,
I've fallen for you
I don't know if I ever want to get up,
You are the one, that something that is real!.

I'm done chasing after you,
I've finally slowed things down
I see you smile,
I know we've made it through,

Forgetting all I used to be,
I've fallen for you
I don't think I can get up,
You are the one,
The one for me,
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like your revised version!. keep at it, and im sure it will sound beautiful,ly!. the song i mean!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love the first one :D

But I would change 'Decisively I was indecisive' to just 'decisively indecisive'

But I don't know, it'd sound like Hanging By A Moment By Lifehouse -- "Completely incomplete"

So that part, I don't know about, but everything else is great!

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i like the bottom 1 better, for some reason i think it flows betterWww@QuestionHome@Com