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Question: What do you think of these two poems!? !?
Hello, thank you for taking the time to read these poems!. I'm just curious as to what you think toward these poems!. These two I made last year based on the current time toward when I was in love!. Enjoy!.
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People come and go!.

Soon I hope, will you return!? I think to myself, are you gone forever!? And at the same time trying to remember all the past!.

Wishing that it could be the same, just like then!. Hoping, wishing, doing everything I can!.

It'll never be the same again!.!.!. Hopeless!.!. All gone!.!. forever!.!.!.

Hopeless!.!.
All gone!.!.
Forever!.!.!.
Done!.!.!.!.


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Looking at you, staring at you, wondering what you're thinking!.

Always on my mind!.

Wondering is she the one!? Is she not!? When will I know!? Always thinking about her, what do I do!?

Do I hope, do I wait, do I just continue to stare every second of my life!?

I don't know, but I hope this moment lasts forever, because it's perfect!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wow;
Every line you write seems to have infinite meanings behind it!. They all give me different memories; all depressing ones!.
The first poem:
This makes me think of losing loved ones, whether it be from death or them leaving by their own choice; fights, cheating, or some other reason!. Which has happened to me many times, so I can sympathize with that!. also knowing that whatever happens, no matter how hard you try, things will never be the same between you and that person again!.
The second poem:
I`ve felt this way before; it`s almost unreal!. It`s nearly impossible to break the moment, to do something!. But you can`t stare forever, Something needs to be done!. Of course, I should not be one to say that, I`m a person of words more than actions!. I seldom do anything to get out of this state of, well!.!.!. I`m not sure the right word; but I`d call it a state of unchanging love!. As in, you want to do something to make them love you back, or let the know you love them, or just wait for them to do something, and nothing happens!. You just let it go on like that forever!. Anyway, that`s just what comes to my mind!.





To sum it all up, amazing poems!. =)Www@QuestionHome@Com

this is great, I can feel the worry and the hope, can picture it!. great job on how you did not ruin it by trying to make it rhyme, because half the time it just makes it worse because it does not make sense!. keep it up and keep inspiring!Www@QuestionHome@Com