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Question: Do you guys (girls) like my poem!?
I posted it in the Lesbian, Gay, Bisexual, Transgender category but I guess it would get more help here!. PS!. I'm bi don't make a big deal!. KK!? Thanks!.

Like My Soul Mate!.

When you smile I feel happy,
When you frown I feel sad,
You deserve to be loved,
And if you don't I feel bad!.

You're the pirate to my ninja,
And the lucky to my charms,
You're the Batman to my Robin,
And the skin upon my arms!.

You're becoming an addiction,
Just like my personal drug,
Without you I'm lost,
You're the kiss to my hug!.

You're everything I strive for,
My one and only goal,
Forget about your broken past,
I can make it whole!.

You're that special soul,
The face inside the crowd,
You're the leaves upon the trees,
And the sun behind the clouds!.

My damaged past means nothing,
It just led me to find you,
I love it when we're alone,
And your brightness can shine through!.

Your confidence is stunning,
And you'll always take a stand,
We talk and laugh like idiots,
But you'll forever hold my hand!.

You're the reason why I smile,
The sound of my laugh,
You're the calm before the storm,
And will always have my back!.

You're the Chuck to my Norris,
The butter to my bread,
You're the shake to my bake,
The voice stuck inside my head!.

You're the music to my life,
The soundtrack to my walk,
You're the Tyler to my Marla,
And the orange to my black!.

You're my everything,
The love to my hate,
You're the perfect girl for me,
My one and only soul mate!.

Orange and black are our school colors!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It seems redundant and cliche, sorryWww@QuestionHome@Com

It reminds me of something I once wrote for my ex girlfriend!.!.!.
And I think it's super sweet, it describes very well the way you feel for her and in the end that's all that really matters!.!.!. Who cares about rhymes and all that stuff!.!.!.!?

I really liked it! Whoever the girl who inspire you is, she is very lucky to have you!

xx :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

You are trying too hard to rhyme!. It makes your thought processes bumpy!. Go back and do it without rhyming!. Just say what you want to say!. Then make it rhyme if that is what you have to do!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very original!. Just like you,unique,fresh and young!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

"You're the pirate to my ninja"!?












Shh!.Www@QuestionHome@Com