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Question: Is this a good poem about being blind!?
Through Blind Eyes

Sounds run free in your mind
Voices you can make nothing of
Gazing at complete darkness
You can see nothing through blind eyes

All alone you feel
Darkness shivers you with fear
No one hears your silent cries
You can see nothing through blind eyes

Through blind eyes wisdom is gained
But is wisdom really worth the pain!?

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It's great when I read your poem it almost made me cry!. If writing makes you happy then keep writing!. The more you do the better you shall be!.

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I like this poem, it's missing something though!. Take some time away from it and revisit it and do an edit!. The last stanza is not as strong as the rest!. Never stop writing

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GeneWww@QuestionHome@Com

its pretty good :D but the last two kinda seemed like u just wanted to get ome rhyming wordsWww@QuestionHome@Com