Lips twitch upwards,
Parting to reveal pearl white teeth!.
A twinkle appears in her eyes,
An ecstatic laugh follows!.
Everyone joins in, they become one!.
Her laughter stops,
The room is still again!.
also, any idea for a name!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
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Parting to reveal pearl white teeth!. A twinkle appears in her eyes, An ecstatic laugh follows!. Everyone joins in, they become one!. Her laughter stops, The room is still again!. also, any idea for a name!?Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: That was awesome! I love the part where you say "Everyone joins in, they become one" Amazing line!!! You have a lot of potential, if you practice more you'll be able to perfect it! A good name would be!.!.!.!."Laughter" Www@QuestionHome@Com pretty good to me!. contageous control!? ha i don't know!. i usually name my poems something completely nonsensical or a repeated idea or verseWww@QuestionHome@Com i think its wonderful =) i would name it controller because she controls the rooms atmosphere but thats just me!.!. keep up with your poems they are great =)Www@QuestionHome@Com Potential!. Www@QuestionHome@Com ok!. for me it sounds ok!. it's not bad!.!.!.!. but if you were righting this poem with the right feelings inside!. it's the best poem then! lolWww@QuestionHome@Com THE POPULAR GIRL CONTROLS ALL!! :) i like it! write more!Www@QuestionHome@Com it's okay, but don't quit your day job just yetWww@QuestionHome@Com |