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Question: What do you think of my poem!? please answer!?
'pain'
It curls around me
The pain so great
It still astounds me
How I hate

My heart beets
What happens
When it meets
the opposite of heavens

Its still there
deep as the sea
but where
can it be!?

I shake in the agony
my pain is prolonged
It won't stop chasing me
I wanted it to be gone: I longed

I am suffering
My injury is inside
My heart is beating
A cut open wide

I can not stop it
it is still there
I try to admit
it is everywhere

Everywhere
for everyone

that suffering
Is beating me

I see
there is no exape


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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I have been trying to find the reason for your agony!. The line "The opposite of heavens" gives only a small clue as to why you feel as you do!. It would therefore seem that you agonize over decisions that you have to make (Or have made) either for good or for evil!. That this agony you are suffering will involve everyone if they are not careful!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Depressing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow, thats really deep it almost made me cry (yes, i'm that sensitive) you have talent keep on writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i think it is really good, it could use some grammer checks thoughWww@QuestionHome@Com

not bad!. first time to write a poem!? Www@QuestionHome@Com