Would anyone like to give their critiques?

Question: Would anyone like to give their critiques!?

Pain stabbing…twisting…pulling out,
Bleeding my heart dry!.
Memories dancing…stomping…swarming,
Driving my mind to madness!.
Tears falling…flooding…drowning,
Draining my body of energy!.
Screams building…throbbing…bursting,
Giving me no relief!.
Broken and damaged, this girl!.
This battered angel!.
Seeking and searching for something!.
Life!? Peace!? Sanity!? Death!?
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Oh myyy i simply love this, so beautiful!.
The only thing i might change is
"Life!? Death!? Peace!? Sanity!?" I think it might flow better that way!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

i have no complaining i think it is very good!. would you answer mine as well!?!.
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