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Question: PLZ READ! what do u think of my poem!? HELP!!?
hi
i have writen this poem frm personal experiences tht r happening now!.
i have only eva written like 1 other poem in my life
im only 12 nd i wrote it in like 5 min so dont expect it 2 be 2 fantastic lol!. here it is:


She tries to hide her feelings,
Her thoughts are deep
She tries to hint how she feels
But she always has to speak
Still no one cares!.

She feels so betrayed
There is a knife in her back,
it hurts so much
but she cant take it out
She sits alone in her room
And cries!.

She feels used,
Wanted when needed for something
But then shoved in a corner!.
She is screaming for help
But no one can hear her!.

She feels alone
No one can understand her,
It kills her inside!.
She wants to have someone to trust
They all turn out to be the same
She puts a fake smile on her face,
Then she cries herself to sleep
Every single night!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
thnx on what you said about mine and for being 12 yes that is a REALY good poem you write better then some kids at my school and iam 18 and a freshmen in college Www@QuestionHome@Com

12!? Nice!
Im 13 and I love to write!.
You're better then me (;
Answer mine!?
http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.

Anyways, i LOVE it!. Very sad though ):Www@QuestionHome@Com

awesomeWww@QuestionHome@Com

its good!. touching!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nice,
im 12 too,
And i wrote my poem in 5 minutes!.
I think u are a good writerWww@QuestionHome@Com

sounds more like a cry for help than a poem!. I'll be your friendWww@QuestionHome@Com

that is so awsome!!! answer mine!? its my newest question on my profileWww@QuestionHome@Com