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this is a free verse poem i wrote, tell me if you like it and if not, why!? what should i change!?




the hardest thing i've ever written
i wonder if it'll ever stop!?
but before i stop pouring out my heart
it all has to be right!.

sometimes it feels like my own prison here
four bare walls of my cell, always fenced in
even outside there are no signs of real life!.
will they ever let me go!?

once again my captors are responsible for my pain
tears leave my eyes as i read
the love of my life rejects me again
how is there always someone else!?

none of this is right
i dont remember committing the crime
that landed me here
the one that fed my life to hell

crazy thoughts always running through my mind
all of them telling the truth,
telling me to run
but where can i hide!?

nothing maters anymore
i can't change the past
giving up sounds so sweet
but the hope of getting it all back, somehow keeps me going!.

i guess im to blame
so quiet, never to speak my mind
always the first to fake that smile
when everone knows its all wrong!.

if only i could say it all,
let him know,
but the three words, just eight letters,
cant fix it, when theres always someone else!.

the worst pain i have ever be through,
i wonder if it'll ever stop!?
o God, please set me free,
make it right again, please stop the pain!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Great dear painy ,

Great peom !.!.!.!.!.

Its written straight from the heart!.!.!.

No one can to touch that , not even an author or poet f english!.!.!.!.


Because this is your poem wich holds your emotions and noone can dare to touche you sweetheart!.!.!.!.


and your poem !.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.

it depicts you!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.

great

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Masterpiece if that was on sale id acually buy it !.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.id email it to everyone in a matter a fact im gonna write it down YEAH ITZ THAT GOODWww@QuestionHome@Com

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