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Question: So what do you think of this poem!? !?
tell me why i still
think about you all the time
tell me why i cant get you off my mind
t thought i was fine
but here it comes again
memories of back then
what would've been
if you didnt lie
an could've look me right in the eye
an tell me that
it would be I
to changed your life for the better
and god willing we be together forever
even after we've passed embracing love
at last life's to short
an goes by to fast
why cant i have a smile an keep it for once
im tired of going on and on months an months
without a kiss of passion
a physical demonstration of the relation
we be having, its depressing how much
i be stressing about my love life
or lack there of
looking up at the sky
a tear runs down my dace
because of lost love
why!? why did i say i loved her an cared for her
even though she didnt care enough to try
im still going through each day
wondering whyWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
WOW!.!.!.this poem is really good!. you can tell it comes straight from inside, and nothing cheesy and fake!. very niceeWww@QuestionHome@Com
Hey its really nice well present well lay out and sounds very touching
Keep up the good work (y)Www@QuestionHome@Com
i like it, but go back and try and edit it-make it flow a little better!.
parts of it seem choppy!.
but its good
=)Www@QuestionHome@Com
other than having a lot of miss spell words and using words instead of letters its a good poem!. you might want to break it up a little! you also use to much syntax, u write the way you speak!.!.!. i changed it little, tell me what u think
Tell me why I still think about you all the time!?
Why i can't get you off my mind!?
I thought i was fine
but the memories play back in
my mind constantly!.
You look me in the eye
and you lied, said I'll be the one to
change your life forever
And god willing we'll be together!.Www@QuestionHome@Com