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Question: How can I improve these two poems!?
First Poem:

In love with you I fell!.
A float up from hell!.
Silent dreams
fantasize in my mind!.
They twist and bind!.
You're suicidal
What about my close call!?
I'm no cinderella
but you make me feel like a princess!.
Why do I depress!?
I guess wishes really do come true!.
There's no reason to beleive the impossible can't come through!.
Rejection is an elegant cold-hearted whore!.
Makes you slide down and hit the floor!.
Beautiful and awful!.
Pinky promise; cross our hearts and hope to die!.
Baby, let me wipe away your tears when you cry,
and put a smile on; it looks good on you!.
Let's make some happy memories
and wish we hd film for those Kodak moments!.


Poem 2:

Picture perfect!.
Photogenic face!.
Dream falling in place!.
Floating on grace!.
Catching falling stars!.
Fashion; Beauty; Icon!.
Vogue, Gucci, Prada!.
Name them; Where them!.
Work it!.
Catwalk to photo shoot!.
Looking perfect, babe!.
Strike a pose!.
Flaunt the name!.
I want to go far!.
I won't settle for less than everything!.
Mine will be that pretty face looking back at you
from the cover of that magazine!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
A few suggested tidy ups and punctuation:

Loving you, I fell
and try to float up from hell!.
Silent dreams
are fantasies in my mind!.
They twist me and they bind!.

You're suicidal
But what about my close call!?
I'm no Cinderella,
but you made me feel like a princess!.
Why now, do you on me, depress!?

I guess wishes really do come true!.
The impossible can come through!.
Rejection, an elegant cold-hearted whore!.
Makes you slide down then hit the floor!.
Beautiful and awful!.

Pinky promise: cross our hearts, hope to die!.
Baby, let me wipe your tears when you cry
and do put a smile on; it looks good on you!.
Let's make some happy memories
and film those Kodak moments!.


Poem 2:

Picture perfect!.
Photogenic face!.
Dream falling in place!.
Floating on grace!.
Catching falling stars!.

Fashion; Beauty; Icon!.
Vogue, Gucci, Prada!.
Name them; wear them!.
Work it!.
Catwalk to photo shoot!.
Looking perfect, babe!.
Strike a pose!.
Flaunt the name!.

I too want to go far!.
I won't settle for less, All is mine!.
Mine will be that pretty face looking at you,
back from the cover of that magazine!.


Good work, All yours, and Best wishes!.
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