Will you rate my poem about things?

Question: Will you rate my poem about things!?

Roses and love
and stars and whispers
and, um!.!.!.!.roses
and true love and
sweet kisses and
mountains and valleys
and
blue sky and
cotton clouds and cold water and soft wind
and
the touch of angels and wings
and really big wings and
really sweet angel kisses
and gentle touches and wild ideas
and a lot more love followed closely
by some more angels and
and
and flowers in the breeze
and moonlight and beautiful things
and roses
roses
roses!.
roses!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

OMG !.!.!.Did you write that!.!.!.!.!.It's not a mere mortal thing anymore!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Too many ands and who says um in a poem!. It sound like it could be a really sweet poem if you can relate these things to her/him!. For example, I found love in a rose or something!. Or your whispers is a pure as a star!. You're just blurting out nouns basically and your poem is really hard to understand!. I'll move any mountain and cross any valley just to grasp at a sweet kiss!. Your skin smells like flowers in the breeze!. Seeing your eyes under moonlight is a beautiful thing!. Your gentle touch give me wild ideas!. Just some thoughts for ya! Your lips feel like cotton clouds!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

The layout of the poem makes me confused enough as it is!. Not to mention all the "ands" throwing me off!. The last part is the only part that rymes, throwing off the theme of the poem!. Other than that, it is very nice, just needs a lot of work!. Unless you wanted it to be that way than whatever cool!.

Sorry just trying to help!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Rose, roses, roses!. Take the rose and elaborate on it!.
Here you are just listing things, like you said, it is a poem about things, all you do is to list things!.
Has no structure, no apparent meaning, reminds me of the dada poetry!.
Is this what you truly desire to transmit!? Nothingness!?
I'm sure you can do better than this, even as a freely unique poem, you can improve this!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I can't even imagine, stars and whispers and really gentle touches and wild ideas!. Hm mm!.!.!.!. Would it do a girl any good to buy a jar of peanut butter!? Just kidding!. It's beautiful, touches a place I never have experienced sorta makes you yearn especially for the wild ideas!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

no offence but i dont really like it!.!.
the wording is ok its just that it sounds like im readding the same thing over and over again!.

"the touch of angels and wings
and really big wings and
really sweet angel kisses"

and stop using the word "and" all through out the poem!.
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Do you believe that everyone is capable of love!? I used to think so, but not so much anymore!. In mainstream America, love, like poetry, has become silly and trivial!. Mistrust is now the guiding light!. A person has to penetrate three or four material layers and then an iron wall of disbelief!. Why we can we just walk around with our pants off!? Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's a great idea and I like the symbol of the rose, kind of a variation on a theme!. However, there was only one line in the whole thing (13) that did not have the word "and!." It could be pared down a bit!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

3 out of 5
6 out of 10
u kept on repeating and!.!.!.!.!.
u put um!.!.!.!. in a poem
that is sad dude
i really wanna say no offense or anything that relates to this poem but it was odd, weird, and bad!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

10!. I was hoping you would mention butterflies among the angels!. Butterfly kisses are awesome!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

11!

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No offense!.
But it needs some work!.

Help!?
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Beautiful!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very beautiful!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. U have talent! Www@QuestionHome@Com

its just a list of random things!.!. its good but really random!. i dont wanna be mean, but anyone can write something like that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

And the really, REALLY big wings have yet to be worn!.!.!.!.in the moonlight and beautiful things!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

the poems about roses and loves are emo, only good if u r shakespeareWww@QuestionHome@Com

It's like, beautiful, and stuff!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sweet and hopeful!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Quousque tandem abutere, DMag, patientia nostra!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Aw!.!.!.!.a poem about angels!.!.!.finally!
I don't care what the others say, ya had me with the angel wings!

Sue/ma/Always!!!!!!!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i saw this question starred by catz and i KNEW it was yours!.

oh my gosh!.!.!.the people that took you serious!.!.how smart are they!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

It sounds like a high freestyle, or just some bulls***!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's certainly different from your other ones!.!.!.!.!.!.xWww@QuestionHome@Com

You've been on the Thoth again, haven't you Dmag!?
Just the right amount of sap!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

YOUR POEM IS EXCELLENT
I RATE IT 9 OUT OF 10 IN TENPOINT SCALE!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

7 out of 10!Www@QuestionHome@Com

it's really really good your a awsome poem writer!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :) :O OMG
try not to say and alot use commasWww@QuestionHome@Com

I see beautiful comfort in this poem!. Keep it up!

VIVA LA RAZA!Www@QuestionHome@Com

If your poem had a smell it would smell like uummm!.!.!.roses and all that good stuff!!.!.!.xxx

I love itWww@QuestionHome@Com

I love it! And roses!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com