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Question: Could someone tell me what they think my poem is about!?
My goal of you reading this is to make sure it's getting the right story or feeling out!. So any feedback is good!.
Feel free to say whatever!. I want it to be perfect!.


He was a dream come true
Before you, he was perfect too
With looks like those
He'd be on death row!.
No more laughs out loud
Feeling crushed is the now!.
Perfection was in him!.
When angels fall
Is when hell will begin!.

He's making a mess
All these tears on his desk!.
Why'd you do this!?
You completely blew it!.
He now feels incomplete
With all these broken dreams!.
No more laughs out loud!.
All he's got is his pen,
All he can do is play pretend!.
Pretty pictures, wet paper!.
Pretty pictures, wet paper!.

He leaned on me for a moment
Giving me feelings I'll never regret!.
Talked too long that night,
Never again will i feel alright!.
At that moment i felt so bliss,
So ignorantly i wanted this!.
To hear a laugh, Just a smile
Just to keep you happy for a longer while!.
I feel so damn confused
Feeling so glad, yet so used!.
So badly did i want it,
knowing that it'll never happen!.
I guess only time will tell,
but the waiting is seriously hell!.

He's making a mess
All these tears on his desk!.
Why'd you do this!?
You completely blew it!.
He now feels incomplete
With all these broken dreams!.
No more laughs out loud!.
All he's got is his pen,
All he can do is play pretend!.
Pretty pictures, wet paper!.
Pretty pictures, wet paper!.

Your love unbreakable you'd say
Distant by time and space!.
All the roses and beautiful art he once drew
Will now never be given to you!.
Don't know what made you do it,
You know you completely blew this!.
He was everything anyone has ever dreamed about
And never will he be yours, your luck is out!.

He's making a mess
All these tears on his desk!.
Why'd you do this!?
You completely blew it!.
He now feels incomplete
With all these broken dreams!.
No more laugh out louds!.
Pretty pictures, wet paper!.
Pretty pictures, wet paper!.

Please love, don't cry,
Negative at you, never will I!.
He might have broke your heart
But now you're braking mine!.
A smile truly all i need,
Even just a giggle will please!.
Perfect is something once more you can be!.
Please love just believe me,
I know of better fish in the sea!.
Perfect pictures, dry paper one day Hun
Perfect pictures, dry paper one day HunWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Lots of confusion with first reading!. Poetry should be enjoyable and understandable with first readings!. Here's the best I can do with laborious reading!.

Avatar's can be so misleading, but taking you at face value you are male!. There was a previous perfect man, an angel, even though looks did not portray that!. First line makes it appear there is another person after this perfect one!. I recant that thought!. This one person was perfect in your opinion!. He completely blew it and can with regrets, only write his dreams with tears, no more laughter!.

He needed your strength, you encouraged, and his perfection is shining through once again!.

also, if we remove the poet from the poetry, it appears to be a girl in love with her perfect dream!. Her perfect dream doesn't realize the beauty of her love for lack of his self worth, but on ending, happiness is in the making!.

Best I can do!. Sorry if I blew it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i'm sorry, but i'm so confused!. i don't get it but i want to know!. could you explain it to me in email or whatnot!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Some of the phase are repeating it again and again!.!.!.!.!.
take out unnecessary words if u can!.!.!.!.!.!.
try to make it short and sweet!.!.!.!.!.!. the better u make it rhymes!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A baby and a lost love!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

all i can say is wow!. Really nice it got me all into it!.

I think it's about a lost love that someone once had!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

idk its kinda unclear!.!.!.i would think its about someone who made her boyfriend upset- maybe broke up with him!.!.!.!.i dont really understand who's narrating though!.!.!.!.and also that last verse doesn't make much sense!.!.!.
however, lots of poems are supposed to be kinda hazy!.!.!.!.and i think that this is really good!.!.!.
ps- its spelled "breaking", not "braking"!. to "brake" is when you brake your bike or car or whatever, you know, but you want "break" as in to break someone's heart!.Www@QuestionHome@Com