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Question: Is this a nice poem that I wrote!?
Its a wonderful day
I think the end is near
I can feel you in my heart
your voice is singing to my ears
I can put my weapons down
I can feel you r around
somewhere
somewhere
I can put my weapons down I can feel your protection
I'm more at ease than sand with no wind
I have a million poems for you
and I have a million questions
somewhere
somewhere
its been very hard without you
I've been lost with many struggles
somewhere
somewhere
the tears are dripping down my eyes
without you its just a struggle!.!.
somewhere
somewhere
I have a lot of war stories for you
and I know that you have a lot for me too
and I can !.!.!.wait!.!.(bling bling, bliiiinnnnggg)
Oh!.!.!.i just woke up!.!.!.it was only a dream
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Very good poem I love it!. You are a very good poet!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It sounds like you almost had a word play of rhyming going on in the beginning of the poem then you kinda' faded into an almost awkward sound!. It's not bad at all!. Revise it a bit more!. read it out loud to your self!.
also, is the "r" a "all" or "are"!.
I like "all" better!.
I really do like the beginning od the poem!. =]
I don't know what to say about the mid-ending!.
Otherwise, you've got major skillz!
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sounds like a song!. kinda has that lyrical beauty to it!. nice work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Poet of the year award!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
beautiful!. but i have to say the ending needs a LITTLE workWww@QuestionHome@Com
very good i hope mine are that good!.!.!.!.can you answer mine nowWww@QuestionHome@Com
Oh I love it!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
OMG!! I LOVE ITWww@QuestionHome@Com
very niceWww@QuestionHome@Com
do u think its nice!?
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