I wrote a poem. Please no negative feedback but what do you think?

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Question:

One World

Many colors,
One world,
And yet I wonder,
Why,
Judgment,
Personality made irregular,
Why,
One world!?
Why,
My world!?

I see no colors,
No light,
No dark,
I see inside,
Beauty,
I see nothing wrong,
Then why I ask,
How can people not see how I see,
How can someone so similar,
Be judged so differently,
Because,
Of colors!.
Why,
One world!?
Why,
My world!?

Differences,
They make the insightful,
Sightful,
Beauties,
How they should be viewed!.
Why,
One world!?
Why,
My world!?

One world,
One dream,
Why not!?
But if,
The world not bad,
Would we see the good,
How important it is,

Why,
My world!?
Why not,
Our world!?

Composed by: Margaret Hoeschele
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I really do like this poem, and this form (I don't know what it's called, but I think of it as "chop-reality") has been showing up a lot!.
As far as negative feedback, please don't be afraid to post like I was!. There are a lot of loving, professional friends here that can offer helpful comments which may seem negative, but they are only meant to help you learn and grow as a poet!. Please be open to all comments and suggestions!
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i like your repetition but you need to change some of your wordings

try finding a good synonym for

beauty, bad, because, wrong

and instead of how important you might want to use insignificant!.

So far a 7 out of 10 Www@QuestionHome@Com

The poem was simple but good!. Yes negative feedback that is cruel is wrong, but you must be able to take critism in order to grow in your writingWww@QuestionHome@Com

sometimes simple is best, you obviously know that, and i love the confused/questionning outlook!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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I give it a 5!.!.!. its good but kind of confusing try to get all your thoughtss together!.!.!. and i think you should accept negative feedback it makes you a better person and writer!.!.!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

one a scale of 1-10 i would give it a 6!.5 it needs some work but with a little work it can easily b a ten Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

i loved it!.!.!.its prefect on my end

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