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Question: Please!.!.!.will you give this a read!?
I've sold myself
Betrayed a trust
Damaged honor
I've been unjust
I cannot stand
With conscious clear
I've blemished something
I held so dear
It's not myself
I mourn today
For I do not
Deserve escape
A friendship dead
From my hand cold
Somebodies dreams
No more unfold
And I with smoking
Gun in hand
Too weak to turn
And face this man
And something dark
Inside of me
Watched me fail
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Needs a bit of polishing in places!. Did you mean 'conscience'!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

I gave it a read, it gave me an image of someone who did something they are not proud of, and feels it cannot be undone!. Most things can be undone if undoing is truly desired, but if it involves more than one, the all(both) parties must work together to undo the thing that was done!. Of course, if the gun is smoking because you just sent a high speed projectile through my pea brain, then undoing in out of the question, until I get resurrected as your cat!. (I know I'll be a cat, because I don't like them much)Www@QuestionHome@Com

We all make mistakes at some time!.Writing about it can sometimes make you feel better about the dreams you have shattered for someone else!.Lesson learned!.You know you made a big mistake,next time you will think twice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

And something dark
Inside of me
Watched me fail
Humanity
A confession deeply described, strongly expressed in a poetic touch!. I like this verse!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Elaine has the answer, forgiveness of self, then it is eaiser to forgive others, and improve self regardless of others!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I read this more as you are the offender and not another person or man!.
It is very dark but it can be a means of healing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think it's good!. Keep writing!. Sometimes the personal stuff, the real stuff makes the best poerty, songs, ect!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It spoke to my heart!. I've been betrayed too many times to count by the men in my life!.

Good luck with your writing!. You're good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very moving!. We need to learn to forgive ourselves before we can reach out to others!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very powerful message!. The poem moves along nicely!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Whew! You grow in power in your voice!

Many of us have held same smoking guns!.!.!.!.
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I think this is very good!.
Tragic and sad, yes, but still very good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

*wow*
pass me that smokin' gun please!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

i thought it was really good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it's very good =)Www@QuestionHome@Com

that's real good, write more poemsWww@QuestionHome@Com

this is very good and intenseWww@QuestionHome@Com