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Question: Another poem tell me what you think!?
kissing is the habit,
but f***ing is the game
he says he loves you
and you think its true
but when your stomach starts to swell
he says the hell with you
5mins of pleasure
for 9 months of pain
3 days in the hospital
and a baby with no last name!.
the daddy is a bastard
the momma is a whore
and none of this would
have happened if
the rubber hadn't toreWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wow very well writen and very true and powerful!.
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You see, that is a talented mind at work!.
Save everything, never throw any of this stuff away!.
Once you have compiled at least fifty thousand words, publish!. Actually maybe 80 or 100 thousand words then edit, and publish!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is a new try !.It seems like rap music!. Very real and raw ,add in the music and tempo and sell it any condom company!.Make sure you buy XXX!. the next time!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Hi Lily; this is great!. The best poem of yours that I've read!. I love how blunt it is and the minimalistic language serves the subject well!.

Well done!
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Raw but as a poem its quite good!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

pretty blunt, very true!. there are really no do-overs!. i wish people could think while they are in the moment!Www@QuestionHome@Com