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The Illusionist

Is she really the one that you’re wanting!?
Or is it all some illusion of love!?
At first glance, you’re convincing,
But then I got to thinking,
Could it be me you’re really thinking of!?

You said you loved her and, oh, how you’re happy,
So I smiled and gave it my best,
Accepted that I wasn’t the one for you,
And buried the aching down deep in my chest!.

All was well, I was piecing my heart back together…!.
Then you turned round and gave me that kiss!.
And now I’m just left here wondering,
What gives you the right to do this!?

Are you trying to throw my mind into chaos!?
Do you want me to be so confused!?
Because I was thinking last night,
That maybe I might,
Tell you once and for all the truth!.

I’d come to you and tell you I’m hurting,
And what you’re doing is wrong!.

Until then I realised, it finally hit me,
That you’ve known that all along!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i like your words, they show a double sadness one of loss one of realisation of betrayal, but hope tooWww@QuestionHome@Com

wow you expressed your feelings in that way beautiful!.the summary is he chose another girl and not you!.
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Really beautiful !.!.!.
However, whoever you wrote it for obviously doesn't deserve you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's actually pretty good, keep it up!! Www@QuestionHome@Com

who the **** rights poems, geez old pplWww@QuestionHome@Com

"Hello, is it me your thinking of!?"Www@QuestionHome@Com

pretty good!. 8 out of 10!. nice rhyming!. verse 4 seems shakyWww@QuestionHome@Com

i like it :DWww@QuestionHome@Com