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Question: Where did your nap time take you !?
Nap time
Mum used to send us to our rooms to nap
Then she would go lie down herself
She would take a book with her
Never read much of it
Before her eyes closed
Breathing became
Slow and even
My sister and I would creep
To her door way, observe
Then scamper quickly to our room
Bunk bed ladder out the window
We climbed hastily out
Dashing on nimble feet
Apple orchard waited for us
Just beyond our fence
It was not far
Climbing in the trees
Playing games it was invigorating
Our imaginations never failed
When the apples were ripening
We would eat them *Green * sour
A seasonal treat
We loved to play
In that orchard
a special place
A childhood rendezvous
A pretend world
This we fabricated
Eventually faded
We grew up
One little hour
Was the best
Of the whole day
We would dash home
Up the ladder, retrieve it
Lie down and close our eyes
Pretending again……
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When mama came in
She never noticed the
Flushed faces and scratches
She had too much on her mind
We were not being naughty
We were just children
Having fun……
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wow, excellent!
How sad I had to have my terrible times of napping somewhere at the 7th floor surrounded by cousins who were really sleeping, but the same as you, I never could!.
And when there was none of our grandparents nearby I was the only one up on the top of the wardrobe and from that point I was almost flying to my parents bed at the next extreme wall of the room!. The other cousins of mine were too young to get up there or too old !.!.!.

Ha, nice memories!
A whole story into a poem, picture by picture!. Very nice!
I like green summer apples, too!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

What a great childhood poem! Of course your mother knew!
Question: Do you think this poem is 'telling' too much!? 'We were just children Having fun!.!.!.!.' that is what is stated in this entire poem!.!.!.uh, I'd leave that out, and end with just the 'naughty!.!.!.' that way, it leaves the reader with a slight question in their minds!.!.!.heheheheheheeeeee!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes indeed, you were just children!.
Adults are allowed to have fun at times
Don't shut your self away from that,
However far away it seems!.
God Bless!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You do these so well!.!.!.!.!.this and the attic stories, you must somehow get them into book form! This is your gift, I think, you are a story teller!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Did you grow up in my neighborhood!? This brought back memories for me - some bad, like getting sick on Green apples!Www@QuestionHome@Com