This is a poem. kind of a reflection of something. i just wrote it now on the sp

Question: This is a poem!. kind of a reflection of something!. i just wrote it now on the spot!. it reminds me of the !?

song pardon me by incubus if i could compare it to anything in that matter

the poodle wouldn't walk!. why would it dance!?
the poodle wouldn't walk!. what did it say!?
the poodle wouldn't walk!. where was it from!? i have one too! can you give me some!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

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It might have hope as a lyric verse, depending on the music played!. As a poem, however, it's out of context!. If you want to turn it into a poem, consider:

The poodle wouldn't walk; why would it dance!?
The poodle wouldn't walk; what did it say!?
The poodle wouldn't walk; where was it from!?
I have a poodle; can you give me some!?

The problem is with the last line!.!.!.where you say "I have one too"!.!.!.one "what"!? and if it is a poodle, then why ask for "some"!? This is what I mean when I say that the verse is out of context!.!.!.there is no frame of reference, so the line is meaningless to the reader!.

You didn't really ask for feedback, you simply said "here it is" and told us what it reminded you of!.!.!.but thought I'd give you some feedback in the event you wanted some and forgot to ask!.Www@QuestionHome@Com