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I inhaled the beauty deep
the excitement as a child,
paddling for the first time
through ripples that tickled
at feet!.
I thought I knew this world
I thought it knew me
but a message was sent in dream,
that life can be so much better,
I know I've seen!.
When you look at death
head on, when you've heard
an angel in song, you fight so
for the strength to be strong,
appreciate whats here and more,
of whats gone!.
So step outside your door,
see the trees, feel the breeze
see them for the first time,
be that child inside you lost somehow,
live for the moment, for the moment is now!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Hello!.
Congratulations on this wonderful poem!
I loved it, it really realises the inner child in you!.
All my kind regards,
Ronni!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
A poem that aches, a poem that breaks, and a poem that puts us together again!.
Congradulations, you are a poet with much to give!.
Thank you for carving and presenting a work of art!.
I hope you continue to create words and thoughts that lift us to our dreams!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
dude i really really really, love this poem man!. good job
Is it about appreciating life, and dont take life for granted, for as any moment could be ur last, well thats at least what saw in it, and i loved!. good message!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Bloody Fantastic!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I'm not a lover of poetry usually, but i really liked this, well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
this is brilliant, so touchingWww@QuestionHome@Com
that's deep :) and quite artfully written
*thumbs up*Www@QuestionHome@Com
WOW!!! your poem is great! luv it!
keep makng poems, coz u r great in that!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com