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Question: Do you get the picture!?
The Picture
By S!. F!. Reborn (Koye Lott)
On a white wall,
In the furthest reaches of my dream,
There hang a picture!.
Painted by the artist I strove to be!.
Framed with light!.
It had a road,
That seemed to go on for days,
Flanked by trees on either side!.
Trees that wore their autumn fashions,
And fragrances!.
That sprinkled the wind with foliage,
Which came to rest on the forest floor!.
That's when I was drawn to the wall,
The moment that I climbed onto the road,
And began to walk!.
Reveling in the swirls of paint,
This new world of carefree colors!.
In my dreams,
I have no borders!.
There are no barriers or edges!.
I am not bound by rules,
Or hindered by reality!.
Today I dreamed a new world,
Dreamed a white wall,
Dreamed a frame,
Dreamed a stairway,
Then stepped into the picture!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wonderful Poem my dear friend!.!.!.
Wouldn't that be awesome if we could actually do that!.!.!?!!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
The editor in me just won the battle!.!.!. "There hang a picture", or "There hangS a picture"!?
Does your use of the past tense "Strove" over the present tense "Strive"mean you've reset your goals, or given them up!?
I think if you wrote this in the present tense it would be more powerful, unless it is meant to convey regret of lost opportunity!.
Like it though!.!.!.!.I like everything that speaks to action over pondering!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
How wonderful picture, so well artistically painted !.!.!.
revelling in !.!.!. what, in the new world after the dream !.!.!.
If the real world rests without the paintings of our dreams, without words, without colours !.!.!.
!.!.!. just white walls !.!.!.
Have your dreams within your heart and have them painted, leave the walls!
Wonderful pictures within your poem!. I would say Autumn is sat out side allover the world!.
The inner iced forever its white, though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Stepping into the picture is
The way to get it!.
As I step into it,
Be invisible,
Move stealthily,
Make no sound,
Mess around with no color!.
Disturb no element,
Then step out of it,
Tell you the real tale!.
Nice read, Sempre!Www@QuestionHome@Com
As writers, we often do just that!. Create a picture in our mind, then step into it to get the rest of the story, then report it through our verse!. It is a hazard we accept readily and with vigor!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Beautiful poem, Semper, thank you for sharing it!! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
You can't find that sh*t at Home Depot!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
One of your best that I've read, really spectacular concept and images!. Well done!Www@QuestionHome@Com
You paint a beautiful dream!. Thank you for sharing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
well done!Www@QuestionHome@Com
i love itWww@QuestionHome@Com
Very nice!. peaceWww@QuestionHome@Com
This is wonderful and the last stanza shines! Can I come with you!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Yes it speaks a thousand words!. A clever write!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
this made me think of something!.!.!.not someone elses writing, just a memory!. i like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Strong piece--Fall seems to bring out the best in us poets!. I enjoyed very much-thanksWww@QuestionHome@Com