Could I have feed back on this poem?

Question: Could I have feed back on this poem!?

Could someone please criticise or complement this poem, suggestions too are welcome, Thanks in advanced xx

T-shirts

A Thousand t-shirts given to teens
worn by thousands of student has-beens
who wore a thousand dreams that never fell
I find another that fits rather well!.

I keep on searching until I find
A tailored shirt which is silver-lined!.

I sew up a thousand tears and a thousand rips
caused by a thousand pain stricken tear-drop drips!.
Soon thousands of stitches will unravel to show
a thousand memories as I grow!.

Then one day I'll give up this shirt,
To another teenager full of hurt!.
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I like it, but the rhythm in stanza 3 threw me a bit, but i'd understand if this is deliberate to prove a point!. Sometimes better hearing it from the poet rather than trying to figure out how the flow and emphasis should work on your ownWww@QuestionHome@Com

I think that you hit the "nail needle" right on the head!.!.!.been there with my kids' friends;!.!.!.!.!.when you do decide to give up the shirt!.!.make sure the the owner has your needle and threadl!.!.!.!.!.because the holes never get completely sewn shut!.!.!.but if it's someone deserving, they will cherish every stitch you have already made!.!.!.!.keep the shirt for postreity!.!.!.!.kinda like Betsy Ross did when she took her first stitches and then got preserved!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I don't understand!. what were you aiming for here!?

I like the shirt silvered lined-line
but dreams fall!? not really!. seems like you used "fell" just to rhyme "well"

and I am confused by the use of the t-shirt n the first place!. Who shares t-shirts!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

that's really good!.i like the use of alliteration and the metaphor of the t-shirt !.!.! keep up the good work!. you should submit it on a poetry website like www!. poemhunter!.com
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Improving the meter would help its flow!.
Very nice symbolism!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

yh its a good poem but a bit weird cause its about t-shirts lol!.but no keep up the good workWww@QuestionHome@Com

Really enjoyed reading this :D Www@QuestionHome@Com

Not bad actually, keep up the good work!Www@QuestionHome@Com

great use of metaphor!. I like this Www@QuestionHome@Com

I don't care what everybody else says! I think it's good!
You should post it at:
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i think your poem flows very nicely!. i like itWww@QuestionHome@Com

I loved it!. i think your quite talented x xWww@QuestionHome@Com