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walking the ley line

walking the ley line
gaia's face smiling
ancient turns slowly
or so l think

invaders they cluster
breaking and bleeding
making imperfect
she who was whole

sweet gaia, self healing
by steath
will
remove them
with their own poisons
will choke and scatter

amending the future
connecting again

turning, the new day
lifegiver arises
cleansed now
and free

turning, the white ghost
of lightness in darkness
of pin point and distance
viewed inacessable

not lost and not found
not needing or wanting
not missing or greeting
no sorrow or joy

impassive and perfect
belonging and natural
heavy and weightless
spinning and turning

walking the ley line
l break it, invade it
not needed by gaia
my poison defeats me

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
no fumes of anger
no streaks of love
rising smoke of past
vibes of gala to lastWww@QuestionHome@Com

Throw in a random hip-hop refrain, like:

"100 carats on my chain, I'm so true to this" or
"Cadillac-ing through the hood, sitting on 24's"!.

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