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Question: A poem I wrote and I am wondering what you guys think about it!. This poem was supposed to explain myself!. !?
What am I!?

I am the ever so soft feathers in your pillow,
I am the pearly white tiger of Siberia,
continuously running through the soft snow,
Blending in ever so calmly!.
I am the color red,
Bright and radiant,
I am the color green,
full of life and peacefulness!.
I am a silent snow storm,
fierce and elegant!.
I am the smell of a tundra,
sharp and fresh!.
I am the taste of limes,
sour, but ever so tempting!.
I am the sound of a tiger roaring,
bold and frightening!.
I am the son of Earth,
full of life!.
I am the dream of success,
The dream of becoming prosperous!.
Who am I!?

I wrote this for Language Arts, is the poem any good!? Thanks for your answers!.



It is not a poem about god!. It's supposed to be about me, but I dont really think this describes me alot I just wrote what I could :/
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im usually an extremely harsh critic when it comes to poems, but this is actually pretty good!.people that say this sucks beyond all reason prob!. cant rhyme ball in a poem!. "dream my baby", you think shakespeare got everything right, no!.poetry isnt a f***in encyclopedia!. "swinglin", the poem isnt meant to be litoral like that, its not the meanng, but the sense!. dont kid yourself!. its meant to stir up controversy!. its meant to be sort of oxymoronic, not everything can be plain and boring!. thats what school is for!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

hell no , this poem sucks, and i know something about poetry!.

If you ask who am I, then why do you say this poem is about you!? Are people actually going to believe you are all of this!?

I thought it was a riddle me this type of poem, but it makes no sense with so many different images that none of them connect at all!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i think it is great, you decribe things very well!. take a look at some of mine and tell me what you think of mine!. keep it upWww@QuestionHome@Com

Your poem is amazing!. You used a lot of description!. The metaphors you used are really good!. Great job!Www@QuestionHome@Com

your poem is great im serious keep writing and keep posting it on yahoo answers!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes it is good enough for english!. keep up good the good work!.
You are on a roll so keep it u!.!.
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It has the feel of those annoying riddles where the reader should guess the object: I am black and white but read all over - a newspaper!.

There were a few good words/lines but often spoiled by the following one being too obvious and cliched: eg I am the taste of limes, OK, sounds good and I am ready to be rewarded with an insightful line but instead I get, "sour but ever so tempting"!. Yawn!. Why is the taste of lime like you!? You need to think a lot deeper than this!.

You refer to tigers twice!. Siberian tigers are never white but Asian ones sometimes are, so that line destroys your credibility, (always do your homework, even on minor facts) and the other reference to them is about roaring "bold and frightening"!. Please, you can do better than that!. A tiger's roar isn't "bold" and this description is straight out of a children's story book!. Go deeper!.

I wonder if you can accept this constructive criticism to improve your next poem!?Www@QuestionHome@Com