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Question: Wishes with winter ,poem ,,please its my heart talk ,what do you think!?
In the winter
There are times I want sit in front of the fire place
And sleep on my cradle
Like a small child that has never been hurt
Why did I grow up!?
I don’t know
I seriously thought that being older is good
I thought I will have more freedom
And rights
When I grew up
I found that I had the right to enjoy the ice cream
And play with my ball
and I lost my right
to have a teddy beside me
why aren’t human smart enough
to enjoy what they have
I wish to have the swing
The same one on our old tree
I miss the air on my neck
In the spring
I miss the life I had
It wasn’t the best childhood
Maybe it was bad
But I sure had my small place
That I can run to
When I want to get rid of everyone
In the winter
I collect my chestnuts
And grill them
And open them alone
And I wish my life was no different
Then a squirrel
That hides and eats
Everyone says how cute
Even me
Even you
I wish I was that ,,
Its only wishes
Maybe one day
I won’t wish anything
And I would wish that I have simple wish
Maybe
One day it will be my only wish
To have a wish


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Since it's heartspeak, I'll simply correct the spelling and grammar:

In the winter
There are times
When I want to sit in front of the fireplace
And sleep on my cradle like
A small child that has never been hurt
Why did I grow up!? I don’t know
I seriously thought that being older would be good
I thought I would have more freedom
And rights
When I grew up
I found that I had the right to enjoy the ice cream
And play with my ball
But lost my right to have Teddy beside me
Why aren’t humans smart enough
To enjoy what they have
I wish to have the swing
The same one on our old tree
I miss the air on my neck
In the spring
I miss the life I had
It wasn’t the best childhood
Maybe it was bad
But I sure had my small place
That I could run to
When I wanted to get rid of everyone
In the winter
I collect my chestnuts
And grill them
And open them alone
And I wish my life was no different
Then a squirrel
That hides and eats
Everyone says how cute
Even me - Even you
I wish I was that ,,
It's only wishes
Maybe one day
I won’t wish anything
And I would wish that I had a simple wish
Maybe one day it will be my only wish
To have a wish

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Damn this poem is way to long and is way too old!. mispellings hurt the poetry experience, When i read your poetry it feels like this!.

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