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Question: I made like 7 poems and this is the first one i ever wrote pls pls pls tell me wt u think of it!?
Our Friendship

Our friendship means everything to me,
I can`t live without it don`t you see!.
When you need to talk I`ll listen to everything you say,
Cause you make me a better person in every way!.

Our friendship is really strong,
Even though sometimes we might be wrong!.
I only keep one secret from you,
Other than that I am always true!.

Our friendship is becoming real close,
When you move I`ll miss you the most!.
When your gone I`ll be really sad,
Your the truest friend I ever had!.

Our friendship is based on us,
We`re not perfect and we do fuss!.
If our friendship came to an end,
I wouldn`t live because my heart would not mend!. Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I think it's real good!.
Considering that you're using an all direct meaning!.
If I write a poem, I'll play with hidden meanings!.
Your poem is the first poem from someone else that I like!.
I mean it rhymes and there's nothing wrong with it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its a true poem, just in the second line change; i can't live without it, can't you see!?
our friendship is real close
and when you move, i'll miss you the most!.

rearrange that and its goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

THAT IS GREAT! Could you post your other poems!?
You should post it at:
www!.fictionpress!.com

Great website, and people who write good poems like yours post their poems up there!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

pretty good!.!.!. i couldnt write anything better!.!.!.!. or anthing at allWww@QuestionHome@Com

Since this is the first poem you've ever written, it shows good promise!. There are common mistakes you've made, but there is certainly nothing "wrong" with your poem!. If, however, you'd wish to "improve" your poetry (not just this poem), consider the following:
1!. Avoid rhymed couplets!. Putting two lines that rhyme one after the other creates a comic effect, and unless that is what you intended, it will come off as being too "rhymy"!. If you like 4-line rhymed poetry, instead of AABB, try ABAB, ABBA, or ABCB!. This helps break up the rhymy sound by delaying the frequency of the rhymed words!.
2!. Be careful not to 'contrive' lines!.!.!.in other words, make the lines rhyme by changing your natural speech or word order just so the word ends up at the end of the line!. Good rhymed poetry sounds like natural speech and almost as if the rhymes were accidental!.
3!. Trust your ear, but trust a stranger's ear even more!. Have someone read your poem that hasn't seen or heard it before and listen to how "they" read it!. You'll often find what they see and hear is not what you intended!.!.!.so don't correct "them", fix the poem so "it" sounds the way you really wanted it to sound!.
4!. For something to be poetry, it doesn't have to rhyme, but it has to create an image, emotion, concept, or thought that is more than just the sum of the words!. When you say something is "like" something else, that's a simile, when you say it "is" something else, that's a metaphor!. Those are both poetic devices, but there are many others!. In some cases, it's the internal sound or rhythm of the poem that makes it poetic!.

So, good start, edit this if you'd like, but I'd recommend you keep it just as it is so you have something to go back to later on and see how your poetry has changed with time, experience and study!.

!.!.!.and please, keep writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com