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Question: Does this poem have what it takes!?
I just wrote this about 5 minutes ago!. It just started with the first line and then i couldn't stop!. lol!. tell me what you think about it!.!.!.thanks

I keep my kicks laced and my pants above my waist line!.
my beats will make your brain cells rattle, call it blow minds!.
and my girl, she cant be valued cause shes better then a dime
and if you even try to hurt her, then I might just cause a crime

which would have me spending time, which is not on my agenda
so best believe ill smack you down, and see if it offends ya
I fly like bird and give your whole crew jet lag
and then by tomorrow, that flag will fly half mast
your gonna need a whole suit, so forget the gas mask
my flow is like acid, they should call me "Haz!. Matt!."

and when i flock the coop, I don't fly I soar
leave them other pigeons picking pellets off the floor

but is mine that they eat, that i leave in street
but i dont feed them from my palm
because they're eating from my feet

and they suffer from defeat, like a flower in the dry spell
throw away your coins, aint no water in this wishin' well
better call us david blaine, see if he can cast a spell
get my money, make it rain so much, it looks like ocean swells


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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Not really a poem man!.!.!.More like a!.!.!.!.stupid song or what you may call it!. And NO it does not have what it takes for whatever you're planning occasionally!. So, try to write a more entertaining poem!. that is if it is a poem!. Not like this rap junk!. =DWww@QuestionHome@Com

okay!. poems are about emotions and that how they are written!.
this is more of a rap!. if you add more i bet you could write a song out of it!. but keep writing!. TRUST ME!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it's not so interestingWww@QuestionHome@Com

pretty elementary dude!. not that great, unless your 10 years old and in that case, its okWww@QuestionHome@Com

Not so sure!. I'm not really one for a poem that rhymes!. It just doesn't get to me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com