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Question: Finally!.!.!. a new poem!.!.!.all that is left!.!.!.what do u think!?
Take back your crown
I don’t want it; I want to fade without a sound
I don’t know where to go
My smile long faded and never will show
How can we feel sad!?
For things we never had
Setting alone in the dark
Cutting secrets in my skin
Confessing to my last sin
All the myths I believed in
Trying to find some reason
The hope we hold on
Like there was no more than one
All the love that was never there
The entire lie’s we use to shear
Left to suffer my fate
My heart too dead to feel hate
All hope is gone
So I hold my last breath
All that is left is death



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TBK :)

The waiting was well worth it ~ I'd say this is one of your best poems!.
I especially like the first two lines, the opening is intriguing, and for some reason it's making me think of Shakespeare's monarchy plays!.

The darker aspects are well balanced, it has a lovely reflective quality, and the last two lines are both haunting and an apt conclusion!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

A grammatical correction: "we use to shear" to "we used to share"
As to the form, it has flow issues for me because there is little usage of punctuations to control the speed!. Use them for emphasis like in: "I don't want it;" If used in other lines we can feel your emotions better, because one long breath has less dramatic effect than several gasps before death!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

actually I personnaly do not believe that is a grammatical error in the line "The entire lie's we use to shear", it has a very powerful statement!. Read the poem again and let it speak to you!.

Awesome! Thanks for sharing and glad to read this new poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Such power in these jaded, desolate words!. I feel strongly connected to many of the images!. Beyond the secrets and the lost hope, "all that is left is death"!. Worth waiting for, this poem screams truth!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow this is an awesome poem from the guts of the heart and i loved it so much!.Your my favorite poet of all times ' and hope to see more again soon!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Raw emotion at it's rawest!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Don`t go away again!. We missed you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com