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Salient (A Sonnet)

A firm foot grips the patch of night
A thief with golden hair
Eclipsing star and shadowed light
The garden’s girth laid bare

Descending flock of fire reigns
The courtyard flashes bright
A family flees with coarse disdain
The gathered watcher’s plight

Children dance on helpless heels
A mother calms her flock
Father’s fate is slowly sealed
The crash of thunder knocks!

The day breaks barren on hardened soil
The hands of hardship slowly coil!.


~~~~DPM~~~~

That hurt!.



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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
As a child, I watched with my family as our 250 yr!. old farmhouse in Vermont burned to the ground, along with barns, outbuildings, you know the rest!. We lost our granddad in that fire, and the memories of the smells, sights, sounds, are chaos in my memory!. (4 yrs!. old)
Putting the rules on this one made a horrifying image readable, and somehow more powerful all at once!. A beautiful poem, I think!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

For myself, the rules offer comfort in my otherwise wickedly chaotic world!. This is superb in every sense, an outstanding flow of form and content, one remarkable image after another!. It culminates in a breathtaking couplet that would move the most hardened heart, and nearly broke mine!.In this instance especially, I applaud the rules, and I applaud this sonnet!. Thank you!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love Alluring alliteration! "helpless heels", "firm foot", "hands of hardship", really good stuff!. I also like the alternating tetrameters and triameters (although I am a pentameter chauvinist)!. As you revise, you might want to take a think about some of the trite rhymes; they are not bad in context but they are there none the less!. Great one!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Only one critique, and that is the rhyme, light night!. I personally hate that rhyme, as it's so overused!. Sorry if i'm too critical you paint a picture of a farm live wellWww@QuestionHome@Com

Sometimes the discipline is a very good thing, it employs all one's gifts, and you, my friend, have so many! I like the 8,6 meter and it's a strong couplet!. And it really reads well aloud !. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I felt you wince!. If it's any consolation, This sonnet is a keeper!. masterful!. Full of images that leap out and grab!. sooth your wounds with our praise!. rules!? oh, yeah!. Dude you rule!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I have used rules just to see if I can,which you obviously are cpable of!.
Carry on,my good man!. (I don't much like writing to rhyme myself,winces at the thought!.)Www@QuestionHome@Com

If I knew the rules!.!. I seldom recall them ** they are out wandering with my mind in some very posh place I hope!.!.
I only try to make words say what they mean to say in the simplest way I know how!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

8,6 meter too! Yup you following someone's rules! Makes you feel like breaking them though don't it!? Nice poem!. Strong closing couplet!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I normally only follow rules out of morbid curiosity!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i feel honored and humble to be in your presence!.!.!.!.!.i dont like it!.!.!.it makes me feel dumb!.!.!.!.!.!.seamanabWww@QuestionHome@Com

Nicely rendered one-hell-of-experience!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I always try to follow the rules but they are too fast!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I try to follow the rules but i keep getting reported!.!.!.!.!.x
Keep up the good work, I'm sorta understanding your poems!.!.!.!.xWww@QuestionHome@Com

I tried to follow the rules once,
never achieved much success!.

You, on the other hand,
manage it quite well!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sometimes I do, but I'm a rebel and I'll never follow all of them!. Very nice poem!. ?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Oooh!!.!.!. That's not like you!.
What have you been eating!?!

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