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Question: Have you ever been almost lost!?
Worry sneaks up on you
at the last second and then
panic
him panting and it's not hot
he's scared, too
so you sit down and cry for a spell
tumbling the oak leaf through your fingers
bright blue sky is gone forever
and now you'll die there
so you hug the old boy
and he slumps at your side
with a wet chest on your knee
you don't want to die like this
he licks your tears
from your dirty red cheek
and you beg him to get up
and walk towards home but he stays
quiet
he is your rock
and you lean heavy on him
and cry and cry and cry
and cry and he knows
something is not right
so he barks
but he never barks he never
sounds like a foghorn in the dusk
but he does now and you hear
the echo
bounce through a patch of thistles
and you see for the very first time
that you have always hated those green bastards
they hurt like hell
you curse them for past pains
and you stand up
brush the dirt from your lap
and go around the thistle patch
and it all comes roaring back
the old boy is smiling now
through a row of white biters
his tongue wags like a waving hand
and now you're walking home
pretending like you were never lost
you were just
tired!.
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?beautiful, emotional!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

This descriptive poem works very well told in second person!. This is something very difficult to do effectively!. The boy's denial that he was lost is typical of the human denial of past truth, thereby attempting to alleviate memories of pain and momentary weakness of spirit!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Thank you for a great read - I love dog stories - and the addition of the boy was delightful!. The feeling of a very young child - was aptly portrayed!. High fantasy and rapid redirection!. The recognition of the thistle patch was well done!. We only need a familiar object - to set us upon the right path ?Www@QuestionHome@Com

You once wrote something similar to this about being hunted and bloodied and your dog either going for help or taking a bullet for you!. I can't quite recall it!. It sounded familiar!.
You write suspense poems/stories very well DMag!. Totally absorbing from Alpha to Omega!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

This absolutely floored me!.!.!.stopped me dead in my tracks!.
A boy and his dog, each feeling pain, the boy his own, the dog the boy's!.!.!.powerful image creating an amazing ability for the reader to empathize with both the boy and the dog!.!.!.!.!.!.and the pretending!.

WELL DONE! DMag is DManWww@QuestionHome@Com

i had a dog like that!.!.!.till the mongrel bit me!.!.!.!.!.!.come to think of it !.!.!.!.i had a wife like that before she bit me!.!.!.!.!.!.thanks for the nightmare!.!.!.!.!.seamanabWww@QuestionHome@Com

The terror of being lost and the joy of having a good dog who understands
told with the rhythm of little boy panic!. Whew! What a write!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Word painting!. Excellent!. I could taste the salt of the tears and remember!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This was wonderful!. And yes I have been almost lost, but then was found!. Thank goodness for our faithful companions I say!. ?Www@QuestionHome@Com

lost yes!. the dog yes but not a dog!.!.metaphor works!. This is !.!.!.so touching and talks to me on many levels!. Oh the relief to find home was just around the corner after allWww@QuestionHome@Com

A boy, his dog, emotion, bravado, wow! Love it!!
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Crush me with earthly weight
allowing
slumber to drown the trails
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this is very good! i don't really know what to say, you floored me!.
amazing job, it's not very often i'm speechless ;)Www@QuestionHome@Com

You are seriously on a roll!Www@QuestionHome@Com

ah!.!.honeyWww@QuestionHome@Com

Gosh Buk!.!.!.!.!.!.reading this brought a lump to my throat!.
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Yes, I've been there!. Thanks to "man's best friend" and for your eloquence!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's not too long for me!. What can I say!? I felt like I was there!Www@QuestionHome@Com

ummmm it's too long for me :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I have no words!. It hits very close to home!.!.!.like right there!.Www@QuestionHome@Com