Do you guys like my poem?

Question: Do you guys like my poem!?

i stare into your eyes
as you stare back
i've never felt like this before
i've realized theres nothing that we lack

we seem so perfect for this
i know your the one i need
without you i'm so lifeless;
without you i'll bleed

as we enter the state of expression,
we forget about all those times in depression!.
i hope this doesn't end anytime soon,
you're everything i need, everything i can't lose!.!.!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

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the last sentence of the first stanza has too many syllables to end with!. it sounds clunky!.

same for the first sentence of the second stanza!.

it just doesn't seem personal!.

remember, poems don't have to rhyme!Www@QuestionHome@Com

No they can't hate it because i am a guy and a girl wrote a poem to ask me out and i said no because i hate poem and i really like her!.Www@QuestionHome@Com