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Question: Do you like my poem, and what should I call it!?
your eyes are darker than the sky
I see them follow me
I know the truth, you can't deny
the hatred that I see
your actions confuse me so much
I want to let it go
but I tremble at your light touch
your feelings, you don't show
I see the way you look at her
you love her, and not me
the fun we had, the things we were
it's like I'm never free
so here I am, waiting for you
to see that I'm in love
but the things you said can't be true
your lies, I'm aware of
I love, I hate, I can't decide
what I'm feeling for you
the reason for the nights I cried
just please give me a clue
soo, thats my poem!. do you like it!? what should i call it!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Well, I have a problem with people calling something "emo" just because it's melancholy, but that is a separate conversation for a different day!.
About your poem: I do like it!.
I get the impression that this man used the speaker; he made her fall in love with him while he refused to give her his heart in return---that belongs to another girl!.
Perhaps this girl that the man is in love with doesn't love him back, and this is all a huge cycle of unrequited love!? Maybe this man compensated for the unshared feelings by starting something with another girl, not intending to have anything "special" with her!.
There's imagery here that's very nice: the black eyes of the boy, full of hate!. The "light touch" alludes to a certain type of adoration!.!.!.
It's a poem of contradiction, I feel like!.
As for titles, you can name it anything you want!. I have some works that are actually titled "Untitled #1, #2, etc!." I've got one piece that's entitled 00!.03!.30 because it took me three minutes and thirty seconds to write it!. Your title doesn't have to match the content of your poem!. As my Comparative Literature professor would say: the title doesn't have to mean anything!. It's the form of the piece, not the content, that makes it what it is!.
Edit: Aw, thank you :] But it's not so much smart as!.!.!.trained!. Haha!. I'm an English major, so taking all these upper-division English courses since about the seventh grade will really get you to analyze anything, you know!? Thanks for the lovely compliment!Www@QuestionHome@Com
trying way to hard but other whys its good it sounds like it has emotion behind it but just make some revisions
call it i know this sounds gay but confusion of the heart (told u)
and i totally didnt steal that form christopher k i didnt even reads his until after i asnwered but whatever ur still gonna think i sniped it from himWww@QuestionHome@Com
Ok I love it! It kinda describes my life!.!.!. Theres one thing you should change though!. When you say "your feelings, you don't show" instead say "Your feelings, they don't show"!. I think it should be call Find Me or Get a Clue :]Www@QuestionHome@Com
I really like it, I don't think you're emo, and sincerely think that it is one of those poems you can't name!.It's like really deep, and yet not!. It's really awsome!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
You should call it Confusus Amor, it means confused love in latin!.
Or Amor caecus est, that means love is blind in latin!.
Overall I like the poem, very good job!Www@QuestionHome@Com
ITS FREAKIN GREAT!!!!! it describes me and my ex-boyfriend's relationship! i am soo glad im through with him but i love your poem! you really should name it there is no line between love and hate or something similar!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
it sound slike the versus of an emo song!. Are you an Emo!? I'd say call it Emo-loveWww@QuestionHome@Com
I like it and idk
http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index!?!.!.!.
mineWww@QuestionHome@Com
its so emo poser!.
I HATE POSERS!!
and im not even emo/screamo/goth/scene/marilynmansonlove!.!.!.
they are all weird!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It's so beautiful! Maybe "Lost Because of You"!? I know it sounds cheesy!. You probably won't like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Title it ''If only'' or ''if you were to know'' or something mysterious like that!. &&nice Job I write too but you write wayyy better!. Or you could title ot ''These things I can never say''Www@QuestionHome@Com
Good poem!. Call it "Torn"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i really liked it!.!.!.ur really talented!. Maybe "Its just like you" !? I dont know but it sounded kool!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
BITTER SWEETWww@QuestionHome@Com
Call it BatmanWww@QuestionHome@Com
Stop Staring at me, you ******* stalkerWww@QuestionHome@Com
I think you should call it "Tremble" :]Www@QuestionHome@Com
call it: There is no line between love and hate!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i really like it, and maybe you should call it Waiting For YouWww@QuestionHome@Com
Ask me when im not highWww@QuestionHome@Com
I love your brains, I want to eat them
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omg u r so talented i wish i could write poems that r so deep anyways i have no idea but great poem (applause) Www@QuestionHome@Com
i luved it! gr8t job! i dont know any ideas for the name!.!.- sorryWww@QuestionHome@Com
Dark Love: A Used HeartWww@QuestionHome@Com
I wish I knew how to write like that!.!.!. Well done!
Oh and it's not emo at all!.!.!. Isn't emo normally a bit extreme!?Www@QuestionHome@Com