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Question: This is my first poem!. Is it good enough for a starter or its not a poem at all!?
Stop the violence
Be violent to your pen and paper


I am not a poet
I am just full of ideas than you
May be you are a great poet
Who cares!?
In your head mate!
You want to fight, shunk me!?
You want to show me!?
Show me on paper
You feel me!?
Your feelings hurt yet!?
Are you scared!?
Don’t be scared!
I am scared too!
It’s a mutual feeling
I don’t want to get hurt or nicked yet alone
Have a criminal record
Tell you what, let us be violent
To our pen and paper
When we feel like smashing that shop’s window let’s describe
Smashing shop window on paper
When we feel like getting drunk
Getting drunk on paper
When we feel like urinating on the bus
Urinating on paper
When we feel like stealing
Stealing on paper
When we feel like shunking someone
Shunking on paper
When we feel like bullying that child
Bullying on paper
When we feel like taking those illegal drugs
Don’t bother taking them on paper
When we feel like having unprotected sex
Condom! Unprotected sex not on my paper
The society has offered us with hundred of choices
Choices we find easy to say yes to
Most of the choices are like keys
We take the keys and open the door
Do whatever we want to do
Open and close the door
It doesn’t make sense
I’ll just have to stick being violent to my pen and paper
When you have written your ideas on paper
Proof read for errors; see if it makes sense
Cos my pieces are free of errors and they make sense
If yours has errors then the chances are, “zéro points” it won’t make sense
In the bin… throw your senseless ideas
I feel sorry for you; let me help you gather new productive ideas
I really feel sorry for you mate!
Let me give you new ideas
But that would make me superior innit, mate!
So next time you think of violence and crime
Write violence and crime on paper
Until you are satisfied with your piece be
Violent to your pen and paper
Or I have won and I am better than you
Think you can produce a better piece than this!?
Be violent to your pen and paper!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This almost a rap piece, full of strutting aggression and c0ckiness, come and 'ave a go if you fink you're 'ard enough kind of attitude!.

One line made me laugh, !.!.Proof read for errors!.!. as you obviously haven't! If you eliminate the spelling, grammar and syntax errors this would be a lot better!.

For a first effort it's actually good, a lot of stuff here is not, believe me!.

I was truck by the refrain ' write violence and crime on paper' very good image!.

Well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it is like a piece of jazz, instant!.!.violence put to productivityWww@QuestionHome@Com

It's the perfect starter!. Your ahead of the pack by having started at all!.

A year from now you'll be so happy you wrote this because it will lead to work that is much better!.Www@QuestionHome@Com