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Position:Home>Poetry> A re write poem Never Hope you like it.?Question: A re write poem Never Hope you like it!.!? Why is life so hard
Never does it get easier ' only heartache and despair!. My heart gets so heavy ' it's hard to carry anymore!. I've failed your summer ways winter comes and then it fades!. Death with the reaper will be coming soon No one to hear to hear my doom!. Just another rotter !. When the sun shines down it's dark and cold' It's when my body ' will be in deaths fold!. May all your dreams come true as for me i only smell doom!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: As I said before I've enjoyed reading your work ,,,,It may be on the Dark Side ,,,So what !!! These writings are Dark,,,, They are Original,,,,And they are very Good,,,, Keep it up,,,,Your doing just fine,,,just fine Thanks ,,,,,,Good seeing you alsoWww@QuestionHome@Com This one certainly embraces the feeling -- the despair -- the hopelessness !.!.!.!. sad, but well verbalized and well written!. The emotion has certainly been captured!. I like how you express the heaviness and darkness of life being hard, so dark and heavy that even sun light is dark and cold!. Oh yeah, you captured the emotion!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I think It`s a great poem!. Most people don`t have a clue what another persons life is all about!. But they have to throw their dumbass remarks in anyway!. If they only really knew what life is about they might be more sensitive towards others!. They are usually selfish people that only care about themselves!. You just don`t worry!. Your life and your poems mean everything too us!. You take care of yourself and your son and don`t give these people another thought!. Edit:Hey Andy, Good too see you up there!.Www@QuestionHome@Com wow another death poem!! how original!.!.!.yawn!.!.!."Death with the reaper" ugh!.!.!.ease up on the doom, lighten up, quit crying about how horrible your life is and dig down DEEP and find the imagery and words that are there!.!.!.you got them, just develop them!.!.!.sorry if my opinion stung a bitWww@QuestionHome@Com I like it!. Only problem is the second and third lines don't have the same flow as all the others!. I can somewhat relate to what you are saying!. Please continue to write! We tend to get the deepest poems at our saddest times in life!.Www@QuestionHome@Com This poem is too gloomy!. don't get me wrong, it's deep and that part's good!. I like poems to rhyme sometimes!. ur rhyming is not bad!. the words were well chosen!. Again, why so gloomy!?Www@QuestionHome@Com toooo emotional!. emotions are important in poems but language is more important!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I liked this a lot as it was surreal of how i feel at times!.THANX FOR SHARINGWww@QuestionHome@Com |