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Question: A dark poem The witching hour Do you like it!?
There is was in the dark'howling noises and all types of voices' filled the air!.
All i seen were shadows in shining black
with blood and sulfur' seeping from the sacks!.
I thought i was dreaming with all the screams
from the coffins in the woods!.
They were singing and screaming chants' from long ago!.
They were wild as they danced ' around the lady in the trance!.
For next was the dance of death!.
She would be the sacrificial lamb'
Before i knew what hit me my hair was on his pelt' wearing all kinds' like you wear a belt!.
The big hooded one' with the gigantic teeth
screamed your next' as he threw me down the leaves!.
Next thing i was praying' oh please let this be a dream
Then came a long tall being with long sharp horns'
as he chanted Your already dead ' as you were never born!.!.!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
You're right, poems don't have to rhyme!.

Ignore the poet of the night guy!. He MIGHT have majored in poetry, but he wasn't paying attention in class!. He's "mistaken" in several of his comments!.

I would make sure to double check for typos and spelling errors!. also make sure you're using punctuation correctly!. You have a LOT of apostrophes that don't belong there!.

I'd also consider simplifying what you're written to get rid of unnecessary words that take away from the feel of the poem!. For example:

There is was in the dark'howling noises and all types of voices' filled the air!.
All i seen were shadows in shining black
with blood and sulfur' seeping from the sacks!.

Could be:

Howling noises in the darkness
Chilling voices filled the air
All I can see are shadows shining black
With blood seeping from heavy sacks

I hope that helps!
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It's not a poem!. Hardly makes sense!.

Poetry is an art form!. The first step is to learn proper grammar!.

The second step is to learn about trope, metaphor, and metrics!.

The third step is to apply them!.

This is prose!. There's a difference, I don't care what they told you in elementary, poetry this is not!. How do I know!?

Because it's what I majored in!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it's good!.!.!.!. yes we like it!.!.!. the beginning is stronger then the end!.!.!. way too many apostrophe's!.!.!. found their usage to be confusing!.!.!. pondering them took away from the rest of the poem!.!.!. you should also hack the second word!.!.!. "is was"!.!.!. is!.!.!. well!.!.!. humm!.!.!. pick a tense and stick with it!.!.!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it! It doesn't have to rhyme just like you said! I love it! Keep on writing more poetry, and you will only get better!. But don't put ones that are too damn good on yahoo answers, because they might get stolen from you!. ah! :PWww@QuestionHome@Com

Wow -- you are good!. I could certainly visualize this, and the flow is good so as to not interrupt the visualization!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Angel i liked this a lot as it was scary and great for halloween!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I loved it!. It`s a great Halloween story!. And you are so right, If they don`t like just keep on walking!. We really can manage without your
comments!. Really!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

no cuz it doesn't rhume good!.!.!.!. but its got good atmosphere!.!.!.!. poems shud rhyme thoWww@QuestionHome@Com

oOoOO, i do like this poemWww@QuestionHome@Com

I liked the story,,,, Now the rest needs to be written properly ,,,This is not a slam

Our LiL Bud-dy,,, Up there,,, Majored in something ,,But He needs more help ,,,, then re-writting this poemWww@QuestionHome@Com