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Question: It's a long poem but I want to know what you guys think!.!.!?
By the way, if I see it published anywhere, I will personally hunt you down and slap a lawsuit on your booty!. :]

Why It Was Him 10-08-08

People ask me one question day after day
Why did you ever fall for HIM of all men!?
I look into their pondering eyes and say
It's everything he's done to me and more even then

It was his smile the day he asked me to be his
It was the way his hand fit in my own
It was that second very perfect movie kiss
It was the way our very love had grown

It was his embrace when we would sleep together
It was his warmth when I shivered in the cold
It was the way I could think of no other
It was with him whom I wanted to grow old

It was that stubborn peice of hair by his left ear
It was that little off colored spot above his right eye
It was the way I always knew he was somewhere near
It was the way he held me when I would cry

It was the sound of his breathing when he was asleep
It was the feeling of his lips against my own lips
It was the way he made my small heart leap
It was how his arms just FIT around my hips

It was the sound of his voice over the phone
It was the sight of his crooked bouncing walk
It was the way his love made my smile show
It was the way we could just sit and talk

It was that he would get mad at something small
It was when he would chase me and pick me up
It was that he would help me when I would fall
It was when he didn't mind me drinking from the same cup

It was when he would make me laugh when I was mad
It was how he always knew how to tickle me
It was how he would always pretend to be bad
It was that he promised to show me and ocean not the sea

It was when he remembered my favorite name
It was just simply the way he liked to be him
It was when he was willing to play my silly games
It was that he would never make my life grim

It was when I was sick, he made me stay in bed
It was that he made my life seem to be worth everything
It was that his chest was a perfect pillow for my head
It was all those time we would break out and sing

It was when I'd wake up every morning to a sweet note
It was how he would make time for just us alone
It was when I was cold, he'd give me his coat
It was the heart he drew on my desk at home

It was when he would tell me "I love you, forever"
It was the rings we used to wear on our fingers that matched
It was how we surpassed any bad endeavor
It was the fact that our hearts were attatched

It is that even though we aren't together we still love
It is that I still dream of him every dark empty night
It is the way I still wish on the stars above
It is the way we would fit just right!.

People ask me one question day after day
Why did you ever fall for HIM of all men!?
I look into their pondering eyes and I say
It's everything he's done to me and more even then!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I think that in there somewhere would be a line that each of us could relate to in our own special way!. We would all chose a different line for a different reason but it would conger the same feelings!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Pretty good!. definitely had some emotion in it!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

extremely great!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

nicely done Www@QuestionHome@Com

cool Www@QuestionHome@Com

btw i lovee long poems ,, theey make theem more intense !.
andd it waas very sweet and delicate !.
thoughh try and work on yourr ryhmingg more(:
hope i helpedd !Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love it, it has a good rhythm to it, and it's meaningful!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

wooowww this was just amazing!. you have great talent !.!.!.
keep it up !Www@QuestionHome@Com

really good!.
very long!.
I would try taking out a couple verses!.
too long maybe!.
could you help me edit my poem!?
i did notice the ryhme and rythm dropped
in like the 3rd line!.
and need help!.
it is due tomorrow!. :|Www@QuestionHome@Com

A little long!!?! Well, Shakespeare was worse!. I don't think you have to worry about it being published!.
It sounds toooo girly!. I know I'm not a boy!. Still!.!.!.
Keep trying!. Good luck!Www@QuestionHome@Com