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Question: Tell me HONESTLY what you think of this poem I just wrote!. Be HARSH!! !?
You may have seen this earlier but i revised it and fixed spelling errors!.
If not to clear thiings some of my friends didnt understand it this is about ANIMAL CRUELTY!.

Distressed

I lived with all that searing pain,
My skin was embedded in that chain,
My water bowl was always dry,
I just didn't understand why,
There was dirt caked on all my paws,
A reminder of my owner's flaws,
And the sun so painfully hot,
They left me there to die and rot!?
Then one day some people came,
They took me away,
My neck went from bloody and sore,
And then wasn't visible anymore,
They didn’t keep me long,
Please tell me what I did wrong,
Now everyday I watch you pass by,
Why won't you look me in the eye!?
Maybe you'd give me a handout or two,
Something, anything to help pull me through,
But yet you keep walking,
While I keep squawking,
Trying to get your attention,
My body could not take any more tension,
All you could see were my bones,
All you could hear were my painful moans!.
My mouth was so dry,
Get your attention!? I had to try
Then one day someone stopped
They didn't give me a handout though!.
They took me with them
They gave me water and food
Then put in a cage that people viewed
Then gave me to new owners
Who then set me free
I'm no longer a sore for sight!.
Cause I have owners that treat me right!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
WOW, I really liked this poem, I would have never thought to write a poem from a dog's point of view that's really creative!. You really gave the dog a voice and humanized him!. Keep up the good work!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!. a little long which might distract your readers from finnishing, and with the second line I know you're trying to make it rhyme, but the chain is embeded in the skin!. so with the chain might be a better line!. the weak verses are ending in attention and tension!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

yea thats a pretty good poem!.!.!. about a dog with a bad owner who ditches their dog and some people find him bring him to a shelter/ dog store!.!.!. trying to get people attention until finally some 1 did n took them home n took good care of themWww@QuestionHome@Com

A few lines should be modified,
and that I'm sure you realized!.

Your poem many have sized,
and about it some have lied!.
But, at least you tried!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think it should go in some animal rights pamplet!. It really makes you think!. I liked itWww@QuestionHome@Com

i like it!.!. tells an interesting storyWww@QuestionHome@Com

Harsh you say!? Hmm!.!.!.!.

I hate it!. Never write a poem again!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

awe!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

thank you for reminding me xWww@QuestionHome@Com

Be harsh!?

I hate it!!!!


( its sad :( )Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it:) !.!.!.!.a little long though Www@QuestionHome@Com

there are a few lines that i dont understand but i like it :]

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