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Question: Poem writing help please!!?
Hi, this is a draft of the beginning of a poem I made up like 10 minutes ago!.
"And from the night, we once do wander
As all is lost, yet we do not ponder
Despite the fact that you never came
We once did dance, and we shall again”
“The darkness approaches, carries on 'till noon
I see it in the sky, that luminous moon!.
It is our duty to serve, for your sake and mine
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“Tis not the life I lead that I shall regret
But the sadness I've caused, the grieve I've kept
Yet amongst roads of sadness, I'll tell you my boy,
Is a long stretch of happiness, smiles and joy!."
You know at the bit where I put *************************!? Well, does any one have a good suggestion of what I could put!? Thanks!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Where **** how about: "Before we're stolen of our precious time"
I actually like the "Despite the fact that you never came"
but if you want to substitute, how about: "Although they tell us it was in vain" or "Despite the fact, nothing we did gain"
I really like your poem by the way!. Good luck!Www@QuestionHome@Com
hey miss g,
what is the poem about!?, it may help a bit more if i know that!.
apart from that i think that it is really good and as you said if your 12 then you have much talent better than mine!?!?wht do you think!?!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
"And from the night, we once do wander
As all is lost, yet we do not ponder
Despite the fact that you never came
We once did dance, and we shall again”
“The darkness approaches, carries on 'till noon
I see it in the sky, that luminous moon!.
It is our duty to serve, for your sake and mine
for ever and ever 'till the end of time!.
“Tis not the life I lead that I shall regret
But the sadness I've caused, the grieve I've kept
Yet amongst roads of sadness, I'll tell you my boy,
Is a long stretch of happiness, smiles and joy!."Www@QuestionHome@Com