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I once was a child
Enjoying warm, sunny days
I lived pure and wild
Under bright brilliant rays

Then I began to grow
Hoping for a solid ground
I wished for it to be covered in snow
but this is not what I found

Everyday in my juvinility
I could not understand the gist
I still kept great vitality
Even though weather brought a mist

I became lost in the dense fog
and so blind I couldn't see
Because of confusing smog
I lost all my youthful glee

My childhood was now in evanescence
And a dark storm began to brew
I was going through adolescence
When the cold rain soaked me blue

I felt the worst of any pain
as I trembled in agonizing fears
The storm was now a level 5 hurricane
The worst seen in 85 years

I had built a home
on a foundation of sand
So, I was now all alone
In a dark and dreary land

When the tempest did finally ease
And the cyclone came to its demise
I collapsed wearily to my knees
As tears streamed from my eyes

The weather quickly changed
And the stars were shining bright
I no longer felt estranged
As a man walking in the light

So, I know it's true
That the calm comes after the storm
Sometimes it takes being subdued
To truely be able to reformWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It's good!. I quite like it!.

But the bit that put me off was!.!.!.

"The storm was now a level 5 hurricane
The worst seen in 85 years"

This kind of takes the poem from being a metaphorical journey where each paragraph is a step forward in time and brings it a little into reality!. The 'level 5 hurricane' is especially off-putting, maybe you were referring specifically to something in your life, like hurricane katrina or something, I'm not sure!.

If you were, then that's fine!. But if you weren't, and created the poem as something that all adolescents can relate to, then maybe that bit needs to go!.!.!.

But otherwise yeah, it's a quite good narrative and walkthrough of life for many youngsters!. Good stuff =D Www@QuestionHome@Com

I loved it! It's beautiful!
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i like this very much
great workWww@QuestionHome@Com

that was a very good poem



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