Please
don't wake me
I
plan on
sleeping!.
She talked
but still
I
wasn't
listening!.
So deep
in rest
I
couldn't hear
her crying!.
She found
out now
I
was the one
worth leaving!.
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don't wake me I plan on sleeping!. She talked but still I wasn't listening!. So deep in rest I couldn't hear her crying!. She found out now I was the one worth leaving!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Luvs it =)*Www@QuestionHome@Com Form is pleasing to the eye, but content doesn't do it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Great! Just the lack of the rythm and rhymingWww@QuestionHome@Com not bad Www@QuestionHome@Com I liked it!. a bit proseish, but still pretty good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |