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Question: I just wrote this poem, what do you think!?
Ok, i havent wrote poetry in a really long time but felt the need tonite!. It's kinda dark, but think it came out good!. What do you think!.!.!.!?


The world keeps on moving
While i feel like im standing still
Used to have so many hopes & dreams
Now think im losing my will

Seems like the friends i have
We used to be so close
Now like a light in the distance
Im all alone on the boat

The more i look for understanding
The less it seems to be there
Im wasting time on these thoughts
just to be headed nowhere

Maybe its me, who knows
Ive always been the same person
But maybe thats part of the problem
No-one else is soul searching

I look at the world and see
The goals of all of these people
Wanting big shiny things
Losing sight and its evil

Sometimes i feel i dont belong
Where no-one cares if you bleed
But i wont change for anyone
And way too stubborn to just leave
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Well, do you feel any better now!?

Your poem is an excellent example of self-catharsis which is the figurative cleansing of emotions which restores and refreshes the spirit!.

When you get into university (and you will because you write smart stuff (besides rap !) you will learn all about bringing repressed feelings to consciousness!.

I'm an academic so this probably bores the xss off you but your poem was such a great example of what I said!.

You are just a young guy, having a wonderful time discovering yourself and the world around you but, like all of us, you have high moments and low moments and you have expressed them as an artist!.

Good on you ! Good luck on all your courses and your future!. Hope this explanation helps a little!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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