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Question: Poem!.!.!.not my best!. !?
I think I'm gunna start talking to her again,
I have all these thoughts in my head!.
I wanna fall asleep on both of her eyelids,
So when she wakes I can fall right into her dreams!.
I hope she knows the scars she made,
I guess she does, cause at night she crys as she lays,
Her head on her pillow I have seen those salt stains,
They are much like the ones on both of my sleeves!.
My best friend said 'it's for the best'
We I guess then I don't deserve the best,
I just want her heart like how it was when we,
Both used to sing the same damn songs!.
On the beach I lay hoping for a wave,
To slowly come and take me away,
I'm in love with a girl who can't see through,
The pain of heartache and the stories of truth!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i absolutely love it!.!.!.!.!.especially the part about falling her dreams!.!.!.i also like the part about how you want her heart to be the way it was when you were together
as i always say to you---its brilliant and sometimes i swear you're writing about what i am going thru in my own life!.!.!.i thank you for that!.
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I find it pretty damn beautiful, specially the first part!!
Maybe It's just kinda sad, but i almost feel what you've written, it's really emotional but in a moderate way, I like how the emotions are expressed, I love it!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
i like it a lot!. i can definitely tell it's a result from heartbreak that inspired you!. i like hte last part the best :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
BeautifulWww@QuestionHome@Com