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Question: What about this poem!? Which is the best!?
I wrote this poem for the guy I like
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People seem to like it

I wrote 2 others and combine them in to that one
Here are the others:


When I see you my heart skips a beat
I don’t know why you make me feel complete
You’re a jigsaw puzzle a discovery
For me you’re the perfect mystery
Trying to connect all of the parts
Coloring in all the hearts
You are a perfect disaster
When I look at you, you look away faster
Every time I see the sparkle in your eyes
I know you can’t tell any lies
When I tease you I’m not trying to make you mad
I can’t think I like you so bad
Just the sound of your voice makes me blush
Is this really just another crush!?

AND:

From the first time that I saw your eyes
I knew you weren’t like other guys
You were so cute just sitting there
Trying to avoid my stare
I love the way you always tried to act
But you looked at me too and that’s a fact
Every time I see you in line
I get tingles down my spine
I see you almost everyday
And I never know just what to say
I can’t help but smile when you look at me
And I wish that you could see
That all i'm doing is falling for you
And I wish you felt the same as I do

which of ALL 3 is the best

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
All of them are good! But I really liked the first of the other two you wroteWww@QuestionHome@Com

It's cute that you're writing cutesy love poems to your boyfriend, and I am sure you are a sweetheart, but the fact is that technically those are all lousy poems that aren't worth anything!. Good luck to you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like the second one because the third one just seems to simple!.
I think the first has more meaning and uses better rhymes!.

I couldn't get the first one -- sorry there seems to be something wrong!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like the one that starts From the first time that i saw!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. Love it!!
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